Kumusta Everyone,
Last week and this week for writing we have been working on writing endings for writing. And at the second week of term 4 we were writing about Little Red Riding and her ending but the story was twisted the Big Bad Wolf was Little Red Riding Wolf and Little Red Riding Hood was Big Bad Girl. But in my opinion it should have been Big Bad Hood because the end of her name was Hood it would make sense that it would have been Hood instead of Girl but that is the illustrator’s choice. But for writing this week we had to write a whole story that related to 3 Billy Goats Gruff. And I will put my story down here for you guys to read. The story will be in a blue colour and if you could give me some feedback so I could improve on my writing.
Once upon a time there were 4 horses on a hillside playing with their toys then came along the ferocious wind scoping up the toys and rolling them over the bridge. Then the tiniest horse trying to tip-toe across my bridge then here I come the bravest prettiest smartest cow you have ever seen before well it was just a bit of a lie well I was the smallest ugliest dumbest cow you have ever seen”. Then I say “ What are you doing stomping on my bridge at this time” then milly says “ Well Mr Brown Cow I am sorry to interrupt you well my toy has gone over the bridge may I please cross over and you can have my older brother he is way more bigger and you could have bigger thighs for dinner” exclaimed Milly. So then I said “ Fine you may pass my bridge but if you are lying then I am coming for you”. Then went milly tip toeing across my bridge. Then I sat down on my seat that was about to break but then all of a sudden I heard someone tip-toeing across my bridge. Then I say “ What are you doing stomping on my bridge at this time”. Then I look up and see it is Billy. Then he says “Well I wasn’t stomping on your bridge I was actually tip-toeing on your bridge but may I please cross the bridge I need to get my toy back”. But I wasn’t playing dumb so I said” What are you going to give me in return for this passing”. He said to me “ Well in a short while you hear a four tip-toeing and if you do then it will be my brother he is the oldest and you can have him for your dinner make sure that it is the fourth and not the third”. So then I let Billy pass then he stomped his way to the other side. So then a short time later I hear a third tip-toeing and then I jump onto my bridge and say “ What are you doing stomping on my bridge at this time” then Tilly says “ Well I was just trying to pass to grab my toy just like my other siblings that have been past so may you please excuse me while I cross the bridge”. I say “ Nope, what do you have in return for letting you pass my bridge well as you probably know I have an older brother and you can have him all to yourself for dinner so now excuse me I have a toy to catch”. So then I let her pass with care. Along came my dinner tip-toeing across my bridge then I jumped up with hungriness and happiness then Silly said “ Why are you looking at me like that”. Then I say “ Well you are my dinner for the next few days so get prepared for the fire”. Then he kicks me up into the air and then I scream “ Wait till I come back I will have you for dinner and then I landed in some cow poop and then I was eaten and then the horses lived happily ever after.
Thank you for reading my blog I hope you have a good rest of your day and remember to spread the gospel.
Nga Mihi – Sala 🙂